Lovely. I especially liked the way you ended the story where you did. That way the readers get to complete the story for themselves.

This is so good! it's almost the same but the 'princess' is poor and common, and there was nothing about her relationship with the prince thought you gave a hint at the end. i loved the beginning, it pulled me right into the story, yes it sounds familiar still but you made it look like a different story with few but drastic changes! keep writing!

but there's a mistake here (or maybe confusion?): how did the queen open the door? queens never open the door, lol. and was it at the palace or the royal family's summerhouse?

:)

have you ever read a story by Levine, Gail? She wrote The Princess Test and this seems a little like it... you should check it out