|Reviews for Another Love Story?|
| Chu-Chi Bear 9/19/09 . chapter 5
It's okay! Funny chapter! I like Danny :)
He's not like most boys, so definitely a good thing. Sorry it took me so long to review xD, i've been busy moving into my dorm ... it's my freshman year WHOO! Lol
I didn't know you were a senior, :) Have fun and take things slow ... (don't get caught up in 'Facebook Drama') Facebook is known for it ... AND GO TO PROM! anyways!
Good luck writing and update when you can, i'll be waiting :D
| Helen Hui 9/12/09 . chapter 4
Okay. Now that is just a SWEET boy! If only there was someone just like that... Lol! Pwease visit my pwofwile! (Pout)
| Chu-Chi Bear 9/8/09 . chapter 4
Lol, you're cheerful, always good.
:( Such a short chapter i wanted more to happen ... oh well! The chapter did go fast paced ... try to take your time :)
The camping trip sounded ... fun? Lol
A few fixable mistakes ... (don't worry i did i bunch of editing on my stories today too xD)
"I really have to go." She said. She looked to me. "I left all your homework on the kitchen table. The office dropped it off with me. I nodded.
you forgot to put the end quotation marks.
“I thought you skipped because of what I told you yesterday. However,” he smiled. “I guess you really were sick.
You forgot them there too.
-winkk- don't worry i'd be happy to be your blind eye, everyone needs one :P
| Helen Hui 9/4/09 . chapter 3
okay. LOVE IT. PLZ, write real soon. I NEED TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS! NEED TO! I NEED IT!
| Koki Enwai 9/4/09 . chapter 3
Wow. Everyone sure moves fast in this story. I mean, Danny's confessing to her already? How long has he even known her?
He seems like a good guy though. One of those nice guys that hate it when sexy girls hit on him. He and the main girl (I forgot her name) would probably get along really well.
Nice work so far. :) And have a great day!
| Koki Enwai 9/4/09 . chapter 2
Oh, that's too bad he already has a date. I wonder who asked him. But I'm glad that the dance turned out well after all.
| Chu-Chi Bear 9/3/09 . chapter 3
Haha the chapter was GREAT lol
Definitely loved the chapter. It's good that you didn't have her jump right in and give her answer (as i said SLOW is always good, just not the sort of slow where it never gets anywhere, make sense?)
Anyways, it allows you to create more of a story than rushing it between three or four chapters and they're already dating, get what i mean? Then you wouldn't have much of a story to tell now would you?
“Danny, do you really expect me to believe that BOY doesn’t like attention from a bunch of sexy girls?” He smiled lightly and shook his head.
One little problem with Katy's line, it sounds like she's talking about someone other than Danny, so you might wanna fix that up a bit :P
Keep doing what you're doing, it's goin good and gettin interesting :D (I'm a sucker for teenage romance stories lol)
P.S. LONG A/N's ARE GOOD! Lol a few now and then won't hurt, i like to know what the author has goin on in their creative little minds.
| AquaBlue17 9/3/09 . chapter 3
It's a typical love story, but really interesting as well. I like how the story flowed and the way you kept building up the moment when the guy confessed. Keep writing!
| Chu-Chi Bear 9/3/09 . chapter 2
Aw that is so cute ;P
Poor Katy needs a boost in her personal life ... but i know how it is having a few close friends and then when they get 'other' friends you kinda sorta keep to yourself.
I think you wrote this chapter well, maybe try to show a bit more of Danny's feelings, his was sorta out there on the unknown branch.
Also, you did a great job with slowing things down, and adding descriptions, good job. Keep up the great work :)
| Koki Enwai 9/2/09 . chapter 1
So she asked him to the dance already? That was quick.
Aside from the fast pace, everything seems pretty good. Like your other reviewer mentioned, you might want to add in a bit of description as to what the characters look like.
Nice work. :)
| Chu-Chi Bear 9/2/09 . chapter 1
Aw, cliffie! Lol. The story was off to a good start. Just a suggestion to give a small description of what the characters may look like ;) Other than that, you wrote a good chapter.
Update soon & Keep Writing.