i really like this one!

(by the way, just to remind you... i can't critique poetry very well, apologies)

but i really do like this one.

i think my only complaint would be...
nothing, actually. i can't find anything at the moment.

great job!

-aliki

good poem! vivid, and the words themselves made me imagine the whole thing, there were no imageries but still..:)

I like the flow, it's very dreaming and I like the verse 2