idk. something about it is kind of ... scary.

these dramatic and daring
exclamatory non sequiturs
that i admire so much.
bravo.

"95 pounds on yr wedding day"... not a big fan of slang like that in poetry

To be honest, I don't get this piece. It might just be too abstract for my simple mind, but I just didn't see the connection between all the different parts. However, I liked the format and I think you used punctuation well to create a flow.

PS If you're bored check out the Review Game and/or its Review Marathon (link in my profile).

I like the ending about saving things, it just sounds so desperately but cool.