i loved the interesting concept here and the gripping writing style.

it's kinda like a mystery. i've read some of the reviews, and they were complaining about it not making much sense. but i think that touch was awesome. it's about a crazy girl, hullicanating (not sure about the spelling) and not in her right mind.

it makes perfect sense, plus the way you've written those in the italics are amazing. they really give a feel to the reader that the girl is nutty in the head...

or she might be perfectly sane...

(reviwed for the freebie reviewing game)

Warning: I am not sure if my review makes much sense :x
Review:
Cool, I like this. You had a really effective, creepy vibe going. I was like, what is happening? :o I think first half was the one I liked the most, because of said creepyness :p You worked it swell. But also, I am not sure if I properly understood the ending. Ending was still cool because all that madness is about to start all over again, aha. But I still don't know what happened.

Frac

Hey, reviewing as I read.

"The sound of yellow chalk and the woman’s red faulty nails being scraped against the dry blackboard."

Is mentioning that it's dry necessary?

"“Can my baby come home to me for Christmas?!”"

Normally I can't stand when people pair an exclamation mark up with a question mark... But the way this fit in-between the dialogue before and after made it work. It came across as urgent rather than childish.

"Her friend just laughed. “And you get special treatment because of it.” She pushed open the door labeled “Cultural Studies 101.”"

Start a new paragraph with that dialogue instead of having it in between text.

This was an interesting story, yeah I know saying that is a cop out but I can't think of much else to describe it. You certainly did pull off the stream of consciousness rather well... to the point where it was creepy yet still intriguing. I liked the "amicrazy?" tone you had in the first half of this. As a reader, it made me wonder how this person came to be "infected" with that sound. I wouldn't have thought of this as a supernatural fic, usually I associate that kind of genre with... vampires and whatnot but, I guess a sound can be otherworldly/supernatural.

The second half of this was rather light compared to the first...obviously. But, I didn't see it coming. So, it's good that your story wasn't predictable.

"One hand…attatched to fingers…fingers with long red nails."

This part made me smirk... "attached to fingers"... made me say "what the hell", but it works for this. Bah, all in all, you managed to give a creepy vibe off well and in the end, it was kind of cute though, to me at least... Twisted that the teacher made her go mad, though.

Nice job.

Wow, that was... eerie, in the best possible way. Such powerful, masterful writing – you conveyed Kelly’s madness perfectly, without making her actually seem over-the-top. It was scary in a way, how fascinatingly creepy this was. It’s certainly a story that I’ve enjoyed very much! Kudos to you and keep writing! You definitely have my vote for the WCC!

Wow, this story was really cool. I've never really read a story like this one before. The whole idea of it was definitely supernatural (obviously because that's what the category is :P). I hope that you post more stories like this. :)

~Kali

The basic theme that I got from your story was that cruelty affects everyone, from the narrator with the constant screech, to the teacher/students who were obviously annoyed with her.

I liked how you experimentalized with stream of conscious writing, but in some spots the narration moved around so much and so fast that it made it difficult to understand the transition from one thought to the next. Although I understand everything that went on, I had to stop a couple of times and reread something just so I could stay on top of it. Keep up the good work.

Much love,
Juliet.
Jules, via the Review Marathon (link in my profile)