this is one of my favorites. i like the first stanza especially but i wouldn't know what the first 2 stanzas were about lol although i like the wording of them.

I liked the descriptions here and the word choices. Very well done.

"I sink my head into my pillow and my dreams"... I liked that a lot. Adding the my dreams is a great touch to set it apart from what is normally said.

I am a bit confused about the middle. Who are the guy and girl there? A neighbor? It just confused me.

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