i replied to this one in the book that you'll read today. this one is depressing too but i realized that most poems either of us write are haha.

i like the last stanza a lot. i'm glad you spelled too write on here cuz you didn't in the book lol.

Your capitalization is weird here. You don't do like every line starts off capital, but you don't do it with the punctuation either. That seemed really odd to me.

I really like how you focused on sound here. It was definitely something different than the other pieces I've read. I also like how you started with a specific scene and then switched to the general of leaving. It helped the reader get a taste of the relationship before the person left. That ending was great too. Really unexpected. Very well written piece.

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