Though the poem only consists of 8 lines, it is still very powerful. I am terribly sorry for what happened to your grandfather and I hope he is doing well. Since this poem holds the truth/reality, it really packs a punch. It's not some poem that you can brush off after reading. I read it three times and the words emiting from it is still there.

Wonderful piece

This is very nice and very serene.

You've got very balanced structures here that adds to the overall atmosphere of healing, I think you've done well.

Your last sentence "Daybreak..." I think if you can, find another word. Even "day" would be good. (Why?) Because the word 'break' is harsh and gives negative connatations. It would be better if you haven't got it in your 'healing poem".

Otherwise, wonderful job!

Narq.

This is very powerful. I'm sorry to hear about your grandfather. :( I will put him in my prayers.

I read this for prayer today, it's oozes strength and vitility, you are amazing.

Aw. This is beatutiful. You're a wonderful writer! I'm sorry about your grandfather. D: