Beautiful. I absolutely love where you took this, it's so original and really rich in word choice, imagery, and description. You took getting lost in a book to the next level, and it said everything.

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Other (Concept):

The concept here was pretty cool. I liked how you blurred the lines between the real and fictional with Beka. She seems to be caught between both, but unlike a lot of speculative fiction which deals with a similar theme, she doesn’t seem to mind so much.

Characters:

While the reader doesn’t know much about Beka, we don’t really need to. The piece is short enough that only the smallest details of her personality are important to us, and what you do reveal furthers the plot.

I like that she enjoys living the stories she reads – it fits with the WCC prompt. Her reaction makes it seem as if it’s something she’s been able to do for a long time.

Scene:

The story was very reminiscent of Lord of the Rings, and high fantasy in general. You certainly set the scene with references to Tolkien (nazgul, orcs, climbing the volcano). It’s an interesting choice for a reference – well known enough that most people will get it, but you don’t let the reference overpower the rest of the piece.

I liked this element.

Ending:

I liked the ending. You wrapped everything up and made a nice reference to the prompt without actually quoting it. It gives the reader a good sense of closure, even if the piece is nice and short.

My favorite line: “Because while many people got to read of adventures of far away and imaginary places, she could actually live them.”

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This is great, Sir. A little short, but it gets the meaning across very well. I'm just a little confused about the last paragraph. Is she still asleep? Or has she woken?

I thought this was a really cool premise. I liked the imagery and the way it was written, but mostly I liked the idea. I wish I was better at short drabbles like this.

Your piece was a little short. To me it was more of a moment in time for this character as opposed to a story told with a beginning, middle, and end, but the writing was very good. I like how you made the scene come alive, I could see the city behind her as she read, and I could also see the image of her falling asleep with the book on her lap. Very nice, overall keep up the good work.

Much love,
Juliet.