An-Author-At-Heart,

Excellent work yet again. Your descriptions of the wants and desires asociated with love are phenominal. Yes, it does sound like the girl was basically invisible to him as she dared to dream of him longing for her, as she did him.

I enjoyed the crystal glass. There is something so poignant about the word 'shattering'. You moved from crisp blue day to shattering crystal, it was an easy and flowing read for me. :)

Okay now... you use the word 'encloses'. Am I to assume that you mean that the girl's heart shuts up tight? Or am I to presume that you mean that the girl's heart now accepts the pain of the gift to another by this crush?
Its a bit of ambiguity thrown in the mix and very entertaining for me.

To the girl - one rose would suffice as proof of adoration from her crush. Nice!
But when the girlfriend is given 18... I loved : "She stole any hope I ever had of dreams coming true." It was saddening yet so believable. One rose = love... he gave the other 18 roses.

And then agnst! it was thrilling to see that their are others who want vendeance just as readily as I. :D
Yes, the girlfriend must pay, but why? Because the crush is still, even now, the object of the girl's affection. He cannot be harmed or hurt even though he's caused this pain.

I appreciate your poetry very much as you touch on very real emotions that are pertinent to everyone. Your use of English is refreshing. Your syntax and use of italics takes me monetarily away from the poem to ponder the line written so. I enjoy these interjections as I've never read poetry like this before.

Great poem! Great, great poem!
Free verse can be so liberating, eh?

Viscera.