"drown my sorrow with thoughts of you"... I felt like it should be in you. You drown in something, not with something.

I like the piece though, I think that first image is so powerful. It definitely captivates the reader. The rest of the piece is great as well.

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I absolutely love this!
Especially the last line.
Amazingly written :)

"Bleed like roses drenched in rain." I love this simile--it's so delicate and delightful.

"Drown my sorrow." It's fascinating to think that we want to 'kill' certain parts of ourselves.

"When I feel nothing." I hate that feeling: emptiness. You don't know what to do with yourself when you feel that way.

I enjoyed reading this. Keep up the good work. :)

I love all of your work!

"i keep chasing yesterday but all i caught were the butterflies in my stomach."

Ah, that line is just as smooth as rain rolling down glass.

You're incredible
:)

So beautiful!
Love the imagery you create. :)