|Reviews for midnight hit 37 minutes ago|
| kloun mannequin 9/8/09 . chapter 1
it seems a song, it's cool, I like the irony in this.
| vitriolicvermilion 9/8/09 . chapter 1
There's something about the title of this that is just absolutely delicious.
I don't know what it is. But it flows fabulously.
And speaking of flow! I like the way the poem flows. It's a little bit broken, but that's a good thing in this instance. It goes along a main line, but there are parts where it branches off and then jumps back. It's neat.
Your use of parentheses also happens to be rather compelling.
I am not normally a fan of swearing in poems (okay, so I don't really care, it just usually doesn't fit in mine), but I really liked it here. It added the the mood of the poem.
I like the descriptive wording and the vocabulary choice!
Lastly, that last line is just...ugh. Exquisite. It's wonderful.
So top to bottom, head to toe, title to period, I love it. Yay (: