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Love what you did with the word soar,
very neat idea, very interesting poem, beautiful. :D

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Honestly, this is a bit too stream-of-consciousness to work as a poem, in my opinion. And I don't mean that in terms of the subject, I mean it only in terms of your format choices; it's kind of vague in a way that suggests you didn't know how to express what you meant, but YOU know what you mean. This creates a bit of a problem for your average reader, that's all. I'm all for abstract poetry, but there's always some kind of tether to reality in even the strangest pieces, it seems, but here I did not see that connection.

that were odd