|Reviews for What I told you afterward|
| simpleplan13 10/17/09 . chapter 1
Review Marathon (link in my profile)!
The word takes seemed odd to me. Voices don't take sounds. They typically make them. Or maybe spews? I dunno, take just sounded odd.
I love the idea though. Belonging to the sound of someone's voice. It's really creative and powerful. I also like the description of it being pulled from their lips.
| a silenced revolution 9/23/09 . chapter 1
i would call this semi-sweetly mysterious.
i like the verb choice of "pulls" especially
because it adds intrigue to the piece.
nice, evocative work.
| Brenda Agaro 9/21/09 . chapter 1
Beautiful and intriguing. I love how you say so much without dragging on.
| Lux d'Marcs 9/15/09 . chapter 1
The raw emotion behind this is truly awesome. it takes great wisdom and purposefullness to put all of what you mean into so few words, but you seem to come by it naturally. wonderful.
| Isca 9/13/09 . chapter 1
I like that the speaker feels safe living within (so-to-speak) her lover's voice. That's very beautiful. :)
| Eternal Skies 9/11/09 . chapter 1
this is so cute! and i think its ingenious, good choice of words
| Dale Christopher 9/11/09 . chapter 1
I like the give and take in this piece. I actually read it a few times and it made me feel like I was going around in circles. Very clever.
| in theory 9/11/09 . chapter 1
I love how you personify an actual voice as a physical entity, giving it the power to take something as powerful as a voice from something as intimate as lips. Very beautiful.
| we share our blanket with 9/10/09 . chapter 1
| xrawritskalix 9/10/09 . chapter 1
This was a sweet haiku. I can imagine somebody saying they belong to that. :)
| amavian 9/10/09 . chapter 1
its weird how you relate these two things, you would think that the girl is giving up to the guy, and in a way becoming less of a person because of it, yet she belongs to the sound of HER name in his mouth, so in another way it's empowering to her.