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simpleplan13 2009-10-17 . chapter 1
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This isn't my favorite piece by you. I just feel like it needs more I guess. Like this could describe anyone instead of a specific person. Maybe that was the intent with the title? But I just felt like she needed more personality (I know it's hard to do that in a haiku...)

I do like the first line. I'm a big fan of long words in haikus, it's not something you see too often.
give me november 2009-10-04 . chapter 1
so simple, so beautiful. it gave me shivers, it made me think.

care to read a few of my own poems?
a silenced revolution 2009-09-23 . chapter 1
another intruiging one,
it seems to convey fear and also somewhat a
feeling of being alive.
Mirabella 2009-09-22 . chapter 1
Nicely mysterious. :)
Cuenta 2009-09-21 . chapter 1
Great job as always. Love the image you created, and how you started this Haiku.
Isca 2009-09-13 . chapter 1
I like that you chose to open the haiku with the word 'enigmatically.' I like the fact that this woman seems to be at peace with herself the most when she's faced with a crisis--that's very interesting! :)
letyoursoultakeflight 2009-09-11 . chapter 1
It sounds so pretty and wistful :)
Dale Christopher 2009-09-11 . chapter 1
I'm a sucker for any haiku that takes up an entire line with a single word. Well played, Juliet.

Peace, Daze
in theory 2009-09-11 . chapter 1
I love how you reserve a whole line of the haiku for "enigmatically", it gives even more power to an incredibly powerful word.

Jack

*officially too tired to function* I am recovering from flu and have not slept since 5pm Wednesday afternoon (it is midday on Friday atm) but I did my best with your new stuff, and will get around to your story/one shot after a snooze.
xokaliox22 2009-09-10 . chapter 1
This was really good in my opinion. It really did fit just another girl. :)
Eternal Skies 2009-09-10 . chapter 1
wow, this is strange-i like it! the words here have magic, simple
red amavia in the twilight 2009-09-10 . chapter 1
'enigmatically speaking...' i love how you open it like that, she does seem to be a bit of a mystery.
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