Wow I read this whole story in a day and this is just amazing! At the beginning I was so worried for Esther because I thought that Max would turn out to be the really creepy obsessed artist everyone had made him out to be. I was really proud of Esther when she planned her escape. This was really well written and I enjoyed reading it a lot. :)

Very enjoyable :)

I prefer the orginal ending. The story's complete, and it's a nice way of rounding it off.

Meh...

This wasn't necessary. I liked the story much better without the extension. So I'm going to ignore it.

Epic. Just... Epic. I blame you and your amazing story of amazingness for keeping me up tonight and preventing me from finishing my homework. (Not really, I'm just a procrastinator.)

At the beginning, when Ess was first kidnapped, I was really afraid Max would really be a deranged psycopath with ill intent towards Ess. But he wasn't and that made me happy. :D

Then it was all suspenseful for so long. It was like before you would tell me what happened, something else suspenseful would come to take its place. My gosh! This was so fun to read!

Then there was that twist! Max's FATHER! Did NOT see that coming!

And the climax! Woo! That was cutting it close. Having Ess have to get off the plane before it took off. Wow.

And of course the very end. Max asks Ess out on a date. Aww! :3

I just loved all of your characters! They were all so unique from each other and all perfect for their roles. And they all had distinct flaws and strengths that meshes together to make an interesting story to read!

Wonderful story, my dear author! I hope you continue to use this talent you have for writing.

Very well written! I don’t suppose you remember me, but I read your story Guilt some time ago. The emotion in this story could be improved on. Somehow, although I LOVE your style of writing and your skill with the language, you don’t convey the seriousness of the situation through your writing in this story. There seems to be light humour scattered throughout. I suppose they do make for very good tension relievers. :) You know what would really help? Interviewing people who have such obsessions. Also, those who have experienced kidnappings. The whole situation seems very absurd, the part where Max ‘kidnaps’ Ess. And while it may prove impossible to find someone who has undergone any kidnapping similar to this imagined one, interviewing actual kidnap victims may still help.

You really should get your work published. :)

Oh! Another thing. While I love how descriptive you are, I think you should include more conversation. One thing my Mum always told me was “show, don’t tell”. By writing out their verbal interaction, you can convey the characters’ personalities more subtly, through not only the way they speak, but the accompanying gestures/blushes etc as well.

P.S. for your last chapter, the extended ending one, I think ‘masculinity’ sounds nicer than ‘manhood’. But that’s just me. alternatively, you could use both since they’re synonyms. It would be less repetitive since you reiterated his need to show it so many times in the chapter.

And OH GOSH. Haha. You should keep the last ending if you want a cliffie. I personally prefer the happy ending! I.E. just have her congratulate him after his dive! Of course, the cliffie is needed if you intend to write a sequel. And please, only a three-month interval? Ess so needs a break from Angoli…

i LOVED the story but if i were you i would not do an alternate ending you should start with a new story it is not hard get tired of a story if it is to long but urs if perfect right now

This story had everything! I loved it! And maybe ess and max wil get married! And have kids! :D

i' keep both endings and write a sequel since chapter 31 is a cliff-hanger

This was an awesome story and I seriosuly couldn't stop reading it. Good job! The characters were well developed and the plot was very original.

hi, my name is esther & i love art.. so it must be fate that i should discover ur story today(my b'day).. i really liked ur story & esther's character, obviously ;).. realistic, at the same time interesting. thank u for a great read. keep up the good work.. and wish u a blessed married life.:)

i liked your story. I liked the original ending best.

man this story was good! i haven't read anything exciting in a while. this was refreshing. i do luv both endings tho. if u r going to use the second ending i say there should be a sequel! i look forward to reading other work by u. the story was very well written.

I just want to tell you what a great story you've written here! i really enjoyed it! great job!

Ez again :) I read this story over because it's so good, and reccomended it. I liked the alternate ending, and it's a good way to cause a cliff hanger, but somehow I think we've missed out on the development of max and ess's relationship. Just a thought, still love it though ;)

Hello. I've been reading the whole story for quite a time. After I've read the first ending, I'm really speechless. This story is really good. Nice attempt for a first story. There are typos though. Maybe you should check it out? I'm looking forward to another great story from you.

Best Wishes )

Red-Eyed-Raven93