This is so sad :(, but also so good.

Firstly I'd like to give my sympathy that such a poem ever had to written. The sentiments were beautiful. On occasions I felt that there was too much effort for the poem to rhyme, maybe a freer structure would have emphasised the grief more and given you more freedom over what you wanted to convey. I'm sorry to be critical of something that clearly means so much to you and don't get me wrong, I was very moved by the poem and loved the last line. Well done.

I can definitely relate to this poem. My Great Grandmother died less than a year ago and I wrote a poem for her/her funeral. It's really amazing how the sad and angry moments of our lives can be transformed into great pieces of art. Great job!