 Isca 2009-09-13 . chapter 1Oh my. That's a scary thought. I like that the title of this haiku correlates so well with the subject of the poem. The reader doesn't pity this man; instead, the reader assumes that this man is reckless and careless, and is thus, a bloody idiot. :P |
 Faithless Juliet 2009-09-11 . chapter 1Your use of ‘beer’ in the first stanza made me think of a redneck, honestly. Beer is such a bourgeois drink, it makes me think of teenagers and dive bars.
Your use of ‘cigarette’ honestly made me think of James Dean, cigarette’s, unlike beer are very high class and sexy. I’m not saying that I smoke, because I don’t, but the act of smoking has always been mysterious, and sexy.
Both of them together created an interesting image in my head. And your mention of the blurring highway makes me think that this person is traveling very fast, and not really paying attention to the world around them. As though they were out of it apart from the act of inebriating themselves. Nice work.
Much love,
Juliet. |