Oh. So keen to know what happens next!

This is a great story. I love how you have incorporated not just witches into the story and that there is A variety of magical creatures. I think the idea of them having many different lives in the past works very well and makes it more intriguing!

Anyway keep up the good work and those words flowing.

(:

It was a little hard to remember what was happening, but I remembered soon enough.

When you're writing, watch out for when you sometimes slip into present tense.

This was a good, emotional chapter though! Jake is being SO aggravating! I'm glad she finally realizes she likes him :) And nice cliffhanger at the end! I can't wait to see what happens.

Yay! I'm glad Audrey likes Jake :)

But I hope she didn't ruin it! Jake's right to be mad, and if I were Audrey, I would never have told him!

Can't wait for the next chapter!

This is a really great story so far. I'm really enjoying it. My only thing is I feel like this story is going so fast. It's only chapter nine and she already knows about her powers and has two guys after her. Unless you're going to throw in a major plot twist, I just feel like you could take the pace a bit slower. But, please keep going!

Ah! You wrote Luke again in this chapter! Haha. You might want to fix that :)

Personally, I think she should overcome the memories that she had of being in love with Lucian in the past, because in the present, she has no reason to be in love with him...and she should go with her present feelings (and that means Jake! haha)

The last few paragraphs just like made my night :) so cute!

Great story so far! I'm putting it on my alerts.

I want her to end up with Jake! He seems like his personality just fits her better. :)

What a dilemma! Can't wait to read the next chapter..

Just wondring, who's Luke?

Good chapter! I wonder what it's going to be like now in English class between Sid and Audrey. And what is she going to tell Sam and her mom?

Yay! This was such a cute chapter. We could tell it was coming, but still cute.

Wow, I wonder why all the guys suddenly like her. And who is that creepy blond guy? This is so great! Audrey's emotions are conveyed very well.

Yay another good chapter! I love makeovers! And I wonder what's up with the necklace..

This was a really good chapter!

The doodling scene is actually very similar to one of the scenes in my story Secrets of Andover. That's kinda cool.

I wonder what's going to happen! I can't wait to read the rest.

Just an observation-you switch tenses from past to present quite a few times.

Hey,

I saw the summary and started to read because I thought it might be similar to one of my stories that I'm working on and I thought it would be cool to read. I'm not sure yet how similar it is, but I really liked this first chapter! Audrey has a really funny and distinctive voice!

There were a few punctuation issues-some of the rhetorical questions should probably have question marks after them, but nothing big. :)

Well I liked it till we got to the part were this is copied out of Twilight. The only thing you changed was like the whole plot but admitedly I don't like anything were one person has to chose between two people that love her. I mean it probably happens in real life but since I'm not a realisit I'm allowed to believe that real life has happy endings. Anyway I like the whole thing except for the part where they're God's little helpers. Now I'm all for Christianity in fantasy and am trying to do so my self, and I doubt I could have done any better. But it just seems like to me anyway, that (in my point of view in Christinaity)it seems unlikely that God would approve of rebirthing. It's rather Hindu, or Buddha sort of thing. I can't quite remeber which one has rebirthing in it, I stink at knowing about any religion that is not my own. So, anyway I really glad though that your promoting Christianity in your soty Keep up the good job!

-Tilly of Silly

P.S. Please,please, please, please, ,please tell me she chooses JAke, and whose Luke?

P.S.S. Did the italics work? I hope they did otherwise this is going to look really dorky, but then again... I always look dorky so no biggie!

you know something, your story casted a spell on me. i love it, i think about the story always!,

write soon

blessed be