Oh wow, this was an intense piece with all kinds of images and feeling swirling around. I loved it.

It conveys a lot of emotion and action at the same time, and was also very unsettling and left it me, as the reader, with a sense of unease and uncertainty. It was a very well-written piece that really leaves its mark on the reader! Loved it.

you have an odd style. i like it though, because there are alot more possible dimensions in it. for instance, more applies for just one commute in your poetry. blood, water, euphoria, not thicker than before... clearly you have multiple personalities
JT!!