This was really great. I especially enjoyed how you emphasized the major attractiveness of the average Joe. And the kissing bit at the end wasn't too painful either. :). Well done.

Started with a kiss scene, ended with a kiss scene. Nice.

The way you incorporated the use of "beetles" was hilarious.

I'm sorry I don't have any constructive criticism for you. I'd like to think that this challenge was easy for you, because you used characters that don't need much characterization. You say "jock" and the audience gets it. But you still described them in such a way that gave them character along with their stereotypes, so there's nothing I can say about that.

Thus, I'll just voice the first thought that came to my head when I finished reading your work: Thank you.

This is really cute and I like how Hannah handles all everything and especially how the romantic stereotypes are averted- at least to a certain degree. This story was unbelievably cute and I like how she stayed herself and got with a guy that accepted that.

That was SO SO So SO SO GOOD. :D BRILLIANT! ::D :D :D :D She reminds me of from Bones...:D I Like Connor.

This was fantastic! I really liked how you used all the classic cliches, but made them seem so uncliche, if that makes sense.

It was overall very enjoyable.

Also, good luck in the challenge.

oh, LOVE IT!

especially all the sciency references!

Ri

Great non-cliche! I don't know what else to say except "Good luck with SKOW!"

- Rebekah

This is a little rushed, but really cute. :) I think you did the challenge justice. I enjoyed reading this!

ahahaha "Bullshevik!"

loved it!

Great! I loved the way you had her reject all of the cliches and stereotypes at the end. Great job!

Man, this was HILARIOUS! Love the parodying elements! :) Congrats on the nomination, good luck!

Just wanted to let you know that this story was amazing. I love the random "not-so-cliches" going on with all the people, and also the MC's character. My favorite scene was probably in the beginning when Adam tried to make a move on her. Although I also loved the scene when she asked Conner if she was a nerd. Or the last scene when she's talking to Conner. Or the scene with Rachael, and the beetle. I think it's safe to say that the entire story is amazing! Thanks for bringing this to FP!

Cassandra

Aww, how cute! Very creative with the "beetle/spider" reference, by the way.

THAT WAS SO FREAKIN' ADORABLE. I loved reading every single word of it! You're very talented! I'm definitely voting for you. You should win! Keep on writing! ;)

That was an amazing one shot. I'm so voting for this in skow.

You got to develop you characters, even though its a short story.