|Reviews for Contact|
| TymCon 11/1/09 . chapter 1
Is this turning into a father son thing, or a love thing? Well anyway this is a good story. Although may be hard to imaginbe for people who havent read obsesion. You dont really describe much just you know odd quirks of the characters. Like swirling orbs. Which was a good thing. Well it was kinda funny when the cop from the obsesion was kinda independant on the warlock:P Oh return to Eden please:P and youre getting a free review of the other one after this.. Dam,n curiosity!:)
| KelaBelle 10/1/09 . chapter 1
wow. your one-shots am amazing. I like how you writted your morgan character too, I think everyone like myself wouldn't mind be ordered asleep, you get good dreams then. Nicely done.
| rmzucker 9/30/09 . chapter 1
i like the characterization of morgan and erling, however i was only confused with the plot-was the occurance between teh two characters (when erling ruined morgans life) in another story? if not, I think you should mention what it is cuz i don't think the story is complete without it. short, but if its with a bunch of other stories then that's not bad.
| BlaznFangurl 9/25/09 . chapter 1
I absolutely adored this story! It makes me want to just jump on the story it was derived from. I do not know if this had any Shonen ai type underlying in it but even if it didn't I still quite enjoyed it.
The relationship between these two sounds like an interested one it this oneshot really makes me wonder about the original story.
Loving the story, Blazn via the Roadhouse, Pay it forward :)
| MantraMagazine 9/16/09 . chapter 1
I must admit my fondness for a situation like this. You represented your characters beautifully, making me as a reader feel those same unsure feelings Morgan's feeling. I'm frantically runnin ou of time, I'm at work, so I can't tell you as much as I would like about how amazing this was (and I don't say that lightly!) but I'll review again later. I'm going to enjoy reading more here, than you so much for posting!
| Sakina the Fallen Angel 9/15/09 . chapter 1
Aww, cute! :)
I really liked this! ...don't have much else to say, apart from the whole master-servant thing was done fabulously.
| Eponine254 9/15/09 . chapter 1
This was good, but I felt that the sudden change from hated enemy to possible lover was a little sudden - maybe a little more dialogue or a sense of the development of the relationship over time could help. Another thing that jumped out at me was the word "orbs". It sounds a little forced - just saying "eyes" would read more easily. Otherwise, good stuff! Well done!
| NocturnalNerd 9/14/09 . chapter 1
I really like the start to this. Morgan and Erling have a very odd companionship. The details of this is still enigmatic, but that's good. It's mostly cleanly written, and subtly detailed. I like it, and hope you will add more soon. :)
Just a few pieces of advice:
1. "rosy red hair that for the most part appeared to be a mess" - How do you mean "most part"? The sentence should be modified a bit in the way it's written to "rosy red hair, that - for the most party - appeared to be a mess."
1. "his - and" and "cared - but" - There is no need for the "-". A comma will suffice.
3. "which didn’t seem to change from what appeared to be some concern" - too wordy for something simple
4. "cold stricken" - "cold-stricken"
5. "always cold - contact with another or his own body heat" - What does this mean?
6. "left after many had been used up in a very short time span" - this is a bit oddly written
7. "it to cause Erling to make him shut up" - "it to cause" doesn't make any sense to me. Anyway to clear this up a bit?
| The Five 9/13/09 . chapter 1
Yes! I get to review another of your stories! XD
Nice continuation from Obsession. This was a little less dark and a bit more humourous, especially with regards to Morgan's indignation and his stuffy nose. I couldn't find anything wrong with it, but the part of the sentence "helping him re-wrap the blanket as it had been moved around a bit" might look better if you changed it to "helping him re-wrap the blanket, which had been moved around a bit".
Overall, fantastic as usual.