spills off the tongue in a lovely way. was particularly entranced by your phrasing "the snow in the wires/ of wind". for curiosity's sake I'd love to know why you settled on "abt".

Hey! I was linked here by a friend of yours, Joey, whom I hope you know at least. He knows I like poems and you seem to like poems so that's all wonderful.

Anyway, I feel like you could pay closer attention to the enjambment of your lines. Enjambment/line-breaking is used (mostly) to give lines a double meaning and give your poem a deeper flow. The first stanza here:

"so admirably, he carries the
dead weight of his
father's oldest shotgun
on his shoulder--"

in my opinion has a lot of potential you aren't tapping into by breaking the lines at "the" and "his". The last word in a line break is given extra emphasis, which I think should be given to something else. Take this rephrasing for example:

"so admirably, he carries the dead
weight of his father's oldest shotgun
on his shoulder--"

There is a double meaning now on dead, representing people and the weight.
As poetry goes though, this is all opinion. Take it or leave it.

so startling, this one, so fresh
and so vivid and clear on the one
hand, but so adroitly conceived
on the other, this little snapshot
of this character out of time and
place. you tripped me up, tyth,
with that 'relict,' but deciphering
that term, it all came together.
those two stanzas beginning with
'ripped' and ending with 'skin' are
simply masterful.