Just finished the last chapter and i must say this is one of the better stories ive read. intriguing plot, well though out characters, and a good balance between action, romance, and mystery. Keep it up.

I'm speechless...sometimes I'm caught unguarded...like confused but then I find myself...and can piece the story along nicely. It a sweet/awesome Story...XD...just wish the next chap was up.

I love the story so far and I can't wait to see what happens next.
Is Astarte really dead or does Cy have to use her new learned power to defeat her?
Does Seth have an animal to him or is it just the Reaper?
I hope you update soon:)

hehehe nicely done. very nicely done! :D

Their relationship seems to have suddenly changed...Also I was wondering what happened to the job she had? and is she able to see all the time now?

Found this earlier tonight, read it, and then skimmed the first Black Petals. I gotta say, this one is a lot better. The first seems to lack detail and flow, plus this rewrite comes with a much more interesting plot. There are parts in both, however, when you seem to jump from one thing to another too quickly though, which is confusing to the reader. Great job so far!

Wow, I have to say, I really like this story. And this chapter was just... heart-breaking. Keep up the great work!

I feel sorry for her...

"so agonizing in it's ascent on her senses" I think you meant 'assault' rather than 'ascent'. Ascent meaning 'rising' and 'assault' an attack on the senses as it would be in the sentence. Interesting to know what happened to her though. Can't wait for the next chapter :)

hahah, that was cute. The random singing part, I mean. Can't wait for the rest.

How is she able to see? Is it the thing from the last chapter, or is this one of her momentary eyesight returns?

Hey, Its a good story but please finish it because i hate it when people start writing and don't finish there story. You could probably make a series if you get the ending right. Anyway, It's good.

hm a mechanical horse. I suppose this will be an interesting read. It is hard to tell yet whether this story will be good or not as it only has one chapter, but it does look like it has lots of potential. It also seems to be rather well written. You probably ought to try not to repeat a word too often in the same sentence or paragraph though. That needs a bit of work example at the end:

"She could see but one but it was such an intense green that it shook her."

You used 'but' twice in the same sentence with only one word seperating it. Ideally any and all authors should avoid doing so. It makes things feel repetitive and can be confusing. Instead of using 'but' twice you could have made the sentence two sentences and given it a more intense feel to it. Such as:

"She could see but one. It was such an intense green that it shook her."

Also when you mention in the sentence before that, his eyes, If she could see only one, you might consider making it singular rather than plural. It would allow the reader to not get stuck at that part if it didn't flow well for them. I know each person is different but I have been called a grammer and spelling nazi lol Anyway keep up the great work. I will be looking to see where this goes. :)