 simpleplan13 2009-10-17 . chapter 1Thanks for your review awhile back. Sorry it took me so long to return the favor.
I'm not a big fan of pieces that are completely bolded. It just doesn't seem to add anything to the piece.
Th dialog was a bit confusing. It was kinda confusing about who was speaking in the beginning. I like the ending though, it makes a good point while still being slightly humorous.
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 LostInMe 2009-09-29 . chapter 1Nicely done! Clever, really, personifying war in that way - who would've thought of it as female? I love the last line, too. It adds the perfect touch! |
 letyoursoultakeflight 2009-09-23 . chapter 1This is excellent! I don't know how you thought of it, but it is a brilliant idea. And your words work so well! |
 surroundedANDalone 2009-09-23 . chapter 1Interesting concept and metaphor. I never thought about war that way, it makes sense really. Nice comedic twist at the end. I think this is one of my favorites. |
 SirScott 2009-09-20 . chapter 1Interesting twist at the end. I think it would sound better if you removed the word to in the last line.
~SirScott |
 Isca 2009-09-18 . chapter 1"War must be female. Why else would men be attracted to it?" LOL. That's a very witty idea. |
 Mirabella 2009-09-16 . chapter 1Quite cheeky and unique i must say! :)
Quite liked it too, a nice quick rhym and moral.
Well done. |