nice book.. i really don't like the constant viewpoint switching. i wish you could just center on a single character. it isn't 'cool' to keep switching around

The rest of my reviews cover this chapter, too. It's developing to be a fantastic story.

Very good as usual - but the first part (when repairing the hyperdrive) was a little bit too predictable - big problem, person fixes it in the nick of time to outrun the huge forces amassed to destroy them, everybody lives happily ever after. Make it unpredictable, or something. You don't need to kill them - just make it seem like they are dead, etc. Great chapter, though. Keep it up - you might be able to publish it when it is finished.

It was slightly rushed, I agree. However, it doesn't spoil the rest of the chapter. Be careful you don't flick between "camera angles", if you will, too quickly. It could just confuse the whole thing. Keep it up, though. We haven't got much physical description of the characters - although it's a bit late for a full-paragraph description, make references to a character brushing back fair hair or something, or a man gazes into the deep blue of a woman's eyes, or something like that, y'know?

I like the descriptions again and the Sakrill are made out to be incredibly evil without too much difficulty. I like the way you've thrown us deep into the action from the first chapter - this is a great way to turn an average story into a gripping page-turner (not to imply that this is an average story made good - this is a fantastic story made even better). I can't wait for the plot to develop!

Not the world's best chapter ending - a slight bit of a damp squib - but apart form that gripping all the way. I like the descriptions of everything and the characters are beginning to develop nicely. Keep up the good work!