|Reviews for The One|
| Isca 1/7/10 . chapter 2
"You are every strange noise uninvestigated." How creative. I like the idea here that the speaker find his lover curious and intriguing.
"You murder me." Indeed. Intense love definitely has that "annihilating" quality to it, doesn't it? ;)
| May Elizabeth 12/26/09 . chapter 2
Wow this is a great edit, it sounds more mature. The last stanza is my fave. :D
| rolliepollie44 12/26/09 . chapter 1
Love the ending line.
Slighty eerie, and very mysterious; love the descriptions, very lovely word choice, and I love how sweet the whole thingis and at the end "you murder me." Lovely work! :)
| letyoursoultakeflight 12/24/09 . chapter 2
Nope, you were correct, it seemed I did miss chapter two!
I like this one too, but perhaps the original is still my favourite :)
You are my muse now that my heart
is in thirds,
- and I love that bit XD
| letyoursoultakeflight 12/24/09 . chapter 1
every strange noise
every impossibility so
little I let it go.
- love that :)
This is such an amazing piece with a very apt name :)
| May Elizabeth 9/29/09 . chapter 1
This makes me think of my old muse...*coughs* my ex *cough*...I love how the this whole poem is more positive and how the narrator enjoyes the stalking of the muse (if I can word it that way), but the last line is so dark and destructive it makes you wonder about how positive the muse is.
"the breaking, buzzing, churning, yearning,"
I think would sound better as:
"the breaking, buzz, churn, yearn,"