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Eternal Skies 2009-09-23 . chapter 1
wow, did you mean that it was too big a coincedence and so it's supernatural?

this was written well, more than well, and it was smooth and easy to read. plus, i loved the ending. she could've died! wow,wow...but the last sentence didn't make sense:

"though how you’d that is beyond me.” you'd doesn't make sense, maybe by mistake?

anyway, it's really good!
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