The pig and the ninny…
-- made me laugh :)

And I love how aggravated all these guys are around each other!!

And stop teasing me!! I need MORE of my questy story!!

Well, you finally brought the main players together. But it still seems to me that you expend too many words on petty personal conflicts. It's hard to see how people with so little liking and respect for each other could work well against dangerous opponents. And I'd like to know more about Jonathan since he is the de facto leader of the mission.

Bwahahaha.
Finally. More.

Now... do it again!

I liked it when she screamed and they all looked at her.
Best way to solve a problem. Act like a psycho and get their attention.
Nice.

Amantha needs a good whalloping.

ha, I love the relationship between Jonathan and Braichad, and Jonathon's cynersism. It's timeless let me tell you.

I especially like the bit where he says:

* “Never say so! I could never harm such a pretty face as yours! And I’d die before I harmed a child.”
He said it so seriously I didn’t know whether it was a joke. But Braichad didn’t think it was funny. *

That bit was deifitely a classic!

Keep up the great work!

Too short! Too short! Too short!

I need more! Pronto!

Good storytelling and character interaction holds our interest. Alternating the rate of travel to avoid exhausting their mounts shows that you have good horse sense. I still think you could make more clear who is narrating -- Ria or Reagan.

“Rule number one, puppy, never assume anything. They could both be Warriors, and there are none in our party who are that.” Jonathan interrupted.
-- words cannot describe the awesomness of Jonathan!! Keep it up!

Haha damn, I'm still crushing on Jonathan! Hmm...so "Rae Rae" sounds like he has a temper - I hope there's going to be a bit of love-hate between him and Ria! (Hmm...Rae and Ria) :)

Fossilised horseshit.
oh! I love it!

Eurgh. Amantha is so damned annoying! She's like Angela. Something happens once and the ...woman... *swallows other words* cant bloody well let go!

The plot is moving along nicely with the introduction of intesting new characters. Since both Ria and Braichad's brother use the first person pronoun, you might make it more clear which one is narrating. About "she stamped her fought at." Is that a new way to spell "foot?" And is a bint similar to a broad or **?

Oh, wow, this is pretty good! I'm going to read more. XD

I love Jonathan so very much! And detest Amantha on poor Rae Rae's behalf *insert evil cackle* Update Update Update!

Woah, how on earth do you manage to write so many stories? And great ones at that! I have already fallen in love with Jonathan – please, please let him be the main romantic interest! Can’t wait to see where this leads :)

Thanks for explaining the title. I like Chapter 2; you're still holding my interest. But there seems to be too much lighthearted boy/girl bantering, considering the seriousness of the situation. You could have used the wordage to reveal more about Ria's world. It must be a pretty savage place, with slavers prowling around. Ria mentioned twice that she was glad Braichad "Took my mind off of things." It seems to me that, with her little brother in danger, she would want to stay focused on rescuing him.

I loves me my Jonathon!! *hugs* Ane he wll only get more excellnt ;) Cannot wait to read more!! Excellantay!