excellent chapter admitting a little hard to get into but good once i back tracked and then read further but still good keep going.

Your an amaxing auhor, i can't wait to read more of this story. It's incredibly interesing and exceptionally wrote.

Interesting. I can't wait for more. :)

I like the imagery but, the formation you have of the dialogue is a bit hard to read on a computer and trips up the flow of the story when you look at it. You might want to skip lines. :]

its good so far a few spelling and grammar errors but other wise really good keep going you seem to have a good story so far.

Wow! I love it!! The description of Corbijn and his background reminded me a bit of Anne Rice. xD

Keep it going! I'm interested to see where this goes. :D

xox