I like where this is going. The internal dialogue in the middle is a little confusing. Your use of italics is good. The bold for emphasis seems a little overdone to me, that that's an author's decision.

Good job!

Ooh! What will happen next? lol. Yay! I am making an official review for your story! Like I said before, I like your story so far and all that jazz lol. By the way... did you realize that you put "The Haven Chapter 1" as the title of your story? You might want to fix that... anyways, great story!