i think the word macabre describes sunsets very well.. once again, another awesome piece!

~tiara♥

Truly a beautiful peice of work. It's words flow as smoothly as the lyrics of a song, and it's text is undeniably lovely. The narrarator is very in tune with nature, and the world around him/her. The ending was magnificent.

This is amazing... I hope to be able to write like you someday

Wow. Gorgeous. I loved the heavy, sad mood in this piece, and the way you tied nature (sunset, ocean, sky) into the feelings was really well done. I can't even pick a favourite line - I really liked "i smile for rainstorms the way you smile for cameras", and 'your eyes speak so much clearer than all the oceans in my chest'. The ending part about god and the stars was extremely well done, too.

"I smile for rainstorms." Whoa. I love this line. The speaker is so 'in tune' with nature.

"I know the sky is empty." Oh wow. I love the tone of this line--it's so heart-breaking and honest.

"Sometimes they blink back tears for me." Great ending. Full of angst.

this is beautiful! "and sometimes they blink back tears for me" this line speaks so much. i think the rythym is great. i just want to read this over and over and fill my ears with it. amazing job!

"i smile for rainstorms the way you smile for cameras"
&
"except for the stars
that clutter up the darkness with light"
Wow. I'm amazed beyond words. I love reading your work :)

This is beautiful!

wow, I like how dark is this, nice scene, I like the part about god living in a hole.

Wow. I love this
& may I say,

I found it to sing like music
In the way poetic words is supposed to be;
singing to my heart & mind
Not my ears

It was clear. Precise.
Oh yeah...
...and breathtakingly beautiful.

Aw...
That was beautifully written, you have a nice style of writing, it had vivid imagery, paired with a layer of thought :D
Great poem :)