I feel for Jake. He had everything going for him, then she left him. Now he's in pieces. I feel his pain. Great job in doing that. Story is starting to pick up pace, which is good. the beginning about which land was most valuable and etc... was kinda slow, but after that, everything was great! Keep going :)

I'm definitely intrigued. You've already peaked my interest with the mention of previous happenings, and I can't wait to see how it all ends up unfolding.

I really like the way you describe things. The last chapter was a bit rushed though...

Still, keep up the good work.

i like this story. Its well written. You should keep this length for each chapter. Also its hard to get into a story or want to keep up with it if there isn't much of it to entice the reader. My suggestion is next time you start a new story at least get 2 chapters in when adding it to fictionpress. Keep updating!

This is great writing. I love the first line that starts off the story. It totally draws you in. This has potential. Keep it up!

Oh! sounds interesting..!!Update...I like the whole novel concept of a very patronizing stepmom who isnt necessarily ugly or makes her do menial jobs ...its unique and you've managed to keep the cold indiference thing still going...

You've got an interesting, well-written start to a story here. Keep up the good work!