Hi,

I don't normally read sf but i've been getting into it lately and I gotta say this is a great piece of work. I didn't think that I would like it from the prologue - the part talking about the arms of the machine seemed a bit repetitive and hard to follow, but the first two chapters did keep me reading all the way through. You definitely have a way with writing natural speech and in first person. I do wonder where you are going with this as I assume this will all come together and give some context to the prologue - but there appears to be a significant time difference. I guess I'll have to keep reading.

Once again, great stuff here

a nice spin on the evil robot story though i felt some of the explainations were a little questionable but easily overlooked by the fact that i was thoroughly enjoying the story. The same goes for gramatical errors and one or two spelling mistakes but im definately not complaining as the quality of writing is quite high something which is hard to come by.

Over all I think you have done a really really good job and i am most definately looking forward to more from you:)

KEEP IT UP!

It's hard for me to find stories that are in the first person and well-written at the same time, but you seem to have quite the mastery of it. It seems as though you put a lot of careful thought into writing your work, which is refreshing. I can't wait to see where you go with this.

Looks like you did your research. This story is really different from anything else I've read. It almost feels like a documentary, or maybe it's just the elaborate exposition. In any case it's good from what I've read.

I'm quite impressed with the quality of writing as it can be hard to come by. I very much like the concept though I have only read the prologue. As a first time sci-fi reader on FP i have to say this is a very promising start. Looking forward to reading the rest.

keep on going :)