First of all, I always love these kind of stories. Probably 'since I can't write them worth beans.xD Uh. Dunno what your teacher wants, so I can't give you any specific advice, but good job. Had a lot of description in the middle. My only critique is that the ending is a bit weak, but I don't know what the assignment is, so it could be just fine by her standards.xD By the way--I think it will be the best. So there.xP