That nightmare scene was so good that it scared me. O.o
And I couldn't help but laugh at the fact that Shen couldn't pay for a cd and yet he paid for lunch with he guy he barely knows.
Well anyway, great chapter! -waits for next- ^o^

I really like it so far! You know how to balance dialogue with action and description, and your characters never seem to drift from their designated personalities. The concept, though it's been done before, is surprisingly fresh and entertaining the way you handle it. The only thing I can really point out at this time is your tendency to make typos. You should read over each chapter thoroughly from the perspective of your readers before posting it because you have a couple of "joinedwords" and "scramble tenses" here and there (to show you what I'm referring to). Other than that, though, I really enjoyed reading this, so please do keep writing! - A-S-Cain

Wow, I never would've guessed Fen would kill her! :O
I really like this story, especially Shen, he's so cool :3
Keep up the good work :D

I told Nyla about a story i was writing about a teenage girl who can see ghosts, but unlike this, it's not asian, it's like everything else I write...cliche and angsty LMAO great first chapter!