I'm going to miss Maynard, however odd his actions. His death was a bit quick... My theory is only reinforced. The person didn't die because he was manufactured life.

Great chapter, fantastic character portrayal.

NYC09

I've got it!

The verse, the altar room, the faulty design comment... Irving is creating life, or trying to. The cages are failed attempts, as was the woman. Celia and Adam were created, and Irving called them puppets, so he is going to use them for something... perhaps a sacrifice. Anjessica was impregnated with one of the creations, and something has gone wrong, resulting in her unhealthy belly.

I think.

Off to continue,

NYC09

Hello again,

Sorry for not continuing last night, something came up. This chapter flows fairly well and is nicely structured, though I didn't get a clear image of the altar room. Also, Maynard's moral dilemmas are getting interesting, and when he says he wants to correct the actions of his kin, does that mean he is righting their wrongs? Or they tried to right his, and he is ending their efforts?

Also, Adam seems to remember something, and he's not telling her. Not sure what's going on there.

I'm going to continue,

NYC09

Hello,

Again, fantastic chapter. I'm sorry my review isn't longer, but I would like to continue. No typos, and the plot is pulling together quite nicely.

In the beginning, the paragraphs labeled 1, are they the prolouge for each chapter, kind of? Then 2 is the main body?

Thanks,

NYC09

Hey,

Again, a great chapter, though I'm quite unsure whether this is a fantasy or science fiction horror, with monsters and mutants and etc., in which case I wouldn't be too interested in reading it. The pregnancy scandal is a nice touch.

I'd love to see more of Irving, because he seems to have vanished in this chapter. Also, I'm very excited to see what's in the room.

Hm,

One typo, "She was the only thing that seemedright." Close to the beginning of the chapter.

As much as I love them together, I find it hard to believe they'd end up together so very fast, familiarity or no. I love her character, as well as his.

I think it's Maynard in her room. Also, this is creepy, without being gory. I'm turning on the lights in my apartment right now :) Of course, my roommates are a bit pissed at that.

Please keep writing,

NYC09

Hello,

I have to admit that though this chapter is very excellent, I'm a bit confused. At the end, did she get outside the castle? Or into Adam's room? I suppose I'll find out when I continue. I can see improvement through these chapters... again, you are a fantastic writer.

Love it,

NYC09

Hello,

Interesting chapter. I have little to say, because I am anxious to continue reading. Again, no typos, remarkable language, and intriguing plot.

Do continue,

NYC09

Hello,

I read your profile, and you a very wrong. You defintely excell in in romance. You portray an electricity between Adam and Celia without making this story into readable porn. Again, description is fantastic.

Irving and Maynard are creeping me out. At first I though Adam was her mysterious guest, but he seems very earnest in his denial.

Do keep up the excellent work :)

NYC09

Hello yet again,

Yes, I plan on reviewing all your chapters to the current point and following this venture of yours :) I really think you're pulling this off quite nicely, and I look forward to reading much more from you. I expect to finish at about midnight, as I am a fairly fast reader.

This chapter is better than the previous combined, and your word choice and character identification has greatly improved, even in such short a time.

However, when I saw that you haven't updated in two weeks, I was a bit concerned. I do hope you'll continue this.

NYC09

Hello again,

The Review: This chapter was much more interesting, probably due to the fact she interacted with other characters. I'm still unsure as to whether this is something I want to follow, but you've almost got me. I'm very interested about Maynard's role in this whole thing, and Irving seems to be the leader. Is Baltus a doctor, because Irving seems to ask him a lot of questions one would ask a doctor or advisor. Also, Adam seems a bit off to me. Not sure if that's what you were going for, but that's my take on things.

Thanks,

NYC09

Hello,

The Review: Although you are a good writer, I had trouble really getting into this story so far. I am intrigued as to what happens next, but I'm guessing other readers were only mildly interested at this point. Your vocabulary is extensive and words well placed, and I saw no typos. The plot seems decent so far, and the length is perfect.

Above all, you really are an excellent writer. The language is great, and sentences well arranged.

Please continue, and I hope this was a welcome break from vague "OMG puhleaz keep goin!" reviews :)

NYC09

this is delightfully scary. keep up the good work.

O interesting revelations.

This story is super addictive. Keep it up!