When I saw you have a fictionpress, I just had to read you story since I love your writing style. And I love this story so far. It really is cute. :D James is an adorable boy character. Poor Mary is so harsh to him, though. But it looks like she's finally opening up to him. ;D I'm guessing he was a noble before his amnesia, but I could be wrong. XD So, James is my favorite so far. Oh, and Wentworth. Awesome butler of awesome (kind of like from The Nanny XD).

I've never been big on historical fiction. I love history, though, especially when involving wars like the Revolutionary war or the World Wars. But I might look more into historical fiction since this story is so interesting. It seems like an enjoyable genre to check out. :)

It's really good so far, so update as soon as you can. Pretty please? :D

- Little Miss Whatsherface (otherwise known as Dark Ambition XD)

aw that was so cute!
totally love their interactions!! :P

HA! James is awesome! You really did a good job writing him.
I loved this whole chapter..I really did!
I like how you have these 2 children acting...they are around 8-11 years old, but they have that hint of maturity that makes it all interesting, plus the childishness that makes it entertaining. It's pretty cool.
And the Princess is becoming more friendly! How nice.
There is one curious little thing though...from the way I understood it, they were both having some tea, outside, in the heat, and they were drinking HOT tea. Wouldn't iced tea be a more refreshing alternative after working in the gardens?
But you know what..I hardly EVER notice ANY typos! It's always been perfect. How do you do it?
Good luck with the rest of your stories and stay awesome!
SilverClock

Wow, very historic I see. A little cute too. I love it so far, the two chapters were really good. :) I hope you update chapter three soon!

I don't think the title is crappy at all. I absolutely adore historical fiction, especially the medieval period. Love it! Which is why I set my story in the 16th century. But I'm not here to talk about my story.

I thought this was great (I'm not a good reviewer so my apologies if I bungle this), I don't know if this is a first draft, but regardless it's very well done. Bravo! You are certainly going into my favorites! Yay for historical fiction!

xoxo,
-C.M. Holst (Immortal King)
w.fictionbycmholst.

wow, I really enjoyed that first chapter. I don't like Mary though, she seems like a brat lol But anyways, I've also read 1776 and loved it! I love David McCullough's books. Can't wait to read more of your story!

ah just the type of story i've been looking for!! hehe not gonna lie.. i love cliches, especially ones set in history!
can't wait until you update! :D

Hahaha! It doesn't really matter to me either way, I read both of those stories.
I really, really liked this chapter. It is something different for me too, and I think you did a good job doing something outside of Kingdom Hearts.
You haven't gotten many reviews...AT ALL... . . .
That must suck.
You'd think that you could advertise this story in Pour Some Sugar On Me. You have probably already done something like that though.
It really is starting from scratch though, isn't it? With Kingdom Hearts stories, you already have a set of characters with their own personalities...plus a crazy fanbase. Just looking at it...there are 6,683 historical stories and...46,672 Kingdom Hearts stories.
Wow... . . .you really are brave to be posting this story here... . .if only you could redirect every Kingdom Hearts fan to look at this story...but I guess that would be cheating..
I personally like this story!
So I'm adding this ONE review to make it a grand total of FOUR.
Eat that, numbers.

Stay Awesome
SilverClock

Ack. Jeez bratty little kid eh? Aha. I like most historic fiction, that I've read anyway. And so far, I like this even though I'm not big on the Revolution, always bored me in school. Anywho, looking forward to see more for this soon.

Whoa. Something that's not...Kingdom Hearts. This is... . different. I saw what you wrote in your profile on FFN so I came on over here and registered. I'm that same SilverClock from FFN.
This 1st chapter you wrote is...interesting. Not epic. Not amazing. Not freaking hilarious. But INTERESTING. Of course this chapter is just a set up for everything that is to come, and I'd like to see how this little boy affects the "princess"...That will definitely be very INTERESTING, and will open up a whole new realm of entertaining possibilities.
And it's good that you love all genres! You get a taste of what you love from absolutely everything and you can put that into your own style of writing.
Good luck with your dreams. I love your writing style and I think you could go far with it. I'm not an expert...but I just love when people go after their dreams. It makes life so much more..interesting.
Stay Awesome
SilverClock

I really like this beginning and I'm so excited to find out what happens next! Please update soon? (: