|Reviews for Death|
| Open your eyes Chopstick 6/8/10 . chapter 1
It seems okay, your story. I got a few suggestions for you:
"You can here their pleas to God asking why"-wrong kind of "here". It should be "hear".
Actually, there are some spelling mistakes. And, on the third "death has been here" you wrote "death has come here." I'm not sure if that was on purpose, but I think you should keep it repitory.
Otherwise, it's a good start. I liked how you made Death a person, not a thing or idea.
Mind R&R my stories/poems too? Thanks!
| LeMaki 9/29/09 . chapter 1
This is very well written and very sad!
For some strange reason, this reminds me of a random song by James Blunt (my mother loves him).