 Kate Marshall 2009-10-18 . chapter 1"your love was everyday warmth, calming and comforting and consistent." I very much love this line. It's wonderful in your first stanza. :) The rhythm is smooth, and the 'c' alliteration adds a nice sound to the line.
"we are falling apart as the leaves fall from the trees." The imagery is nice. It's clear. Accurate. But what I like best is the consistency. You kept your theme perfectly in the poem. :D
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 Little girl Big world 2009-10-01 . chapter 1Aw, I'm so sorry to hear that. It's never good when people start changing for the worse and become like someone you don't really even know anymore. I'm not a big fan of change sometimes...
However, it made for a lovely poem.
I love love love the concept of the seasons changing represent him changing. Just beautiful. & the part, "your teasing the cloud cover." is just a breath taking line. Amazingly written. |