"fly around my tummy cos of you!"... 'cause

"I hide all the umbrellas cos"...'cause

I thought this one was a little bit ridiculous. It just seemed too much, especially that umbrella part. Also, it seemed odd 'cause it was hard to tell the relationship between the two people. Does he know that you like him?

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This is sweet in a special way. I think it would make an interesting song if it was expanded slightly. Nice poem :)

I thought this was really sweet. The swear spoiled it somewhat. It just didn't seem to fit. It had a very sweet and nice ending though. :)

Ooh, I can imagine this as a catchy song - the kind of upbeat music that's sort of in-your-face and yet utterly cute. ) Nicely written. Thanks for sharing

What a charming love poem! If you wrote it to a real person, I am sure you two must be very happy together. If not, it is still a good poem.

"Push them away." I love this part of the piece-it's so powerful. :)

Aw, that made me smile a lot. :) It was very sweet and made my heart happy. _ Great job! -Qzie

beautiful poetry i like the tittle

very nice, keep it up