i wish they at least kissed and told each other that they lurve each other

hahaha that was a cute exchange. Its really good considering that its just dialogue (pretty impressive considering you didn't use any descriptions or actions, just plain old speech)and were still able to get a story out of it.

I especially like the parts where they talk about action-- like the bit about breathing into her ear.. or talking too loudly, or about to poke someone-- these are all actions narrated by their conversation, but its enough to create a visual of whats going on so its not just empty conversation in your head
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Oh and the other thing I like is that there is a general plot line.. the conversation is really random... and has the potential to be completely crazy and nuts (at which point I would dismiss the characters as psycho and lose interest in their conversation) but in this case, you can see where the thoughts are coming from and they seem like rational creatures that are able to use reason. That makes it a lot more fun to read, as well as more realistic, while also keeping it interesting by using a small amount of randomness.

I do confess that I lost track of who was saying what a couple times though-- maybe they need more distinct personalities/styles of speaking? But then again, I dont know "who" is speaking in the first place.

Overall pretty good. :)

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Cute. You pack a full story into two pages of dialogue. I like this. :)

and she's back! and definitely kicking some ** in the writing department. yet another awesome story. keep it up.

cute.
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