her relationship with sam felt so..fast.. hahahah! aww paul doesn't sound like a loser anymore... maybe he just did in my head... anyway! interesting story. lookin forward to seein the love blossomin:D:D:D ahahah

oh dude. there are some errors in both chapters. nothing that double-checking cannot fix:]]

funny how you made paul introduce himself:)) sounds just like a loser:D

...still deciding whether it's the nice kind of loser, or the annoying kind...

This is a good piece, though some editing could be used.

There were a few grammatical issues.

Overall, this was nice.