*explodes laughing* *wipes tears* Oh my goodness. That was just so unbelievably amusing and sweet-god gave me a toothache! *snicker* Oh man, I love the fact that apparently she's a good writer, which means she should be good with words and he completely flabergasted her! It was, I don't know 'cute' until the last line. I know it was supposed to be serious, but I just had to laugh out loud because it was so fantastic. This Brice guy sounds like a real card-smooth and honey. It was great. I have such a hard time with short one-shots and you nailed this. Kudos! Cheers

that was so adorable and sweet and quite realistic. loved it ]

aw, so cute! ;D

this was really cute!

i'm glad i took the time to read it!

Good: Adorable...The last bit was pricesless, I think I actually sighed after the last line. I also like that you take a little conversation, cliche defying yet creating at the same time and do so much with it. Emotion-wise. If that makes any sense.

Bad: Erm...nothing much...at first I was going to say that it was very dialogue based but then I realized that was kind of the point. You could maybe put more detail in there, at least surrounding the characters (like did she walk away, did he gram her arm, did she push hair out of her face etc.) if you wanted but not necessary

Happy: The whole thing made me happy and smiley.

Sad: It ended...I didn't check if this is a one-shot or not. But I almost want to know what comes of Brice and Nila...again not necessary.

i love this story, you definitely should continue.

i love how even in the short time the characters have developed and you get to know them a bit

love it :)

keep it up

wow..this story is very good. i like it he has to convince her that he was attracted to her, and how he did it. good job. the ending was wonderful, when they kissed, and he said guys like me love girls like you. i really like it.