very good. nice job.


Xkristie marieX

A nice one.. The first statement doesn't seem to be connected with the rest of the poem; feels as if the sheer possibility of being forgotten makes you want to make each moment last longer. I enjoyed the long list of happy things, and the repetition of 'beauty' comes just at the right time. Loved it.

But there does seem to be sinister things creeping in - falling leaves, loneliness, dark. Perhaps those are the haunting thoughts of being left behind?

~fleur