Beautiful. It was sorta like this for me when I returned to China for a visit, too.

Wow! You sure are talented! Love how you ponder identity in the first stanza... so well done!

I enjoyed this simply because of how personal it was. There were parts that felt a little akward, like it was trying pretty hard to be poetic, but the whole is very well written, and I enjoy the pieces of very structured poetry here and there to break it up.

I think what hits me the most is that inner look at your experience and the ability to feel some of what you do even though I cannot truly relate to your situation. Very interesting.

My friend and foe, my land and home,
of mystery vast and fate unknown,
I’ll smile and wince and gasp and mock,
and I’ll love for you're my own.

That is really great! It could be a real poem!

Franziska

Beautiful!
I love it, especially the ending.

Love this part:
My friend and foe, my land and home,
of mystery vast and fate unknown,
I’ll smile and wince and gasp and mock,
and I’ll love for you're my own.

wow! nice job, i really loved it:)

check out some of my stuff! maybe you'll find something you'll like! i love reviews!:)

of cause the long version is better than the fragment I read recentliy

The linen “these moments in life, forever’, but in the end an empty dish” are just genial! I’m glad you had such a good time
Franziska

P.P. don't polish it. i like it the way it is

You have a way with words and amazing talnt! :)

too late for sunset, too early for stars. : Loves this line.

And the ending was brilliant.
This series of poems are amazing!

This is amazing! Bravo!

you paint beautiful pictures with your words.

“Home” is a beautiful title. Are you really born in China?
For somebody who has never been to China this is a surprising modern view on the country with millions of people, neon light and modern cars.
Do Chinese priest really say their prayers in Sanskrit? And why does this remind you of Kurt Coban (except his band’s name Nirvana)?
An impressive, very atmospheric poem anyhow. I hope you can post soon more!

Love Franziska

P.S Great, there are hardly any rhymes!
P.P.S. I corrected Emily, thanks for the advice