very inspiring last lines.. again, i am totally awed.. you are a brilliant writer/poet and i'm glad i added you on my favorite authors' list because you're uber awesome and your poetry serves as my solace and source of inspiration.. && i lovelove your poems very much..

..xoxo..
~tiara♥

Wow feels like the only thing I can even muster up right now.
I'm in complete awe.
That was AMAZING, seriously.
The intensity was brilliant and the last stanza, blew me away.

And on a side note,
I'm going through a lot, and to cut things short, your poem has seemed to help.

Like the last stanza.

"And I'm so sorry, but when the sky lies crumped
You can't just fly away
Though maybe instead we could find a way through
And if I looked to the sky for hope, would you come too?
Cos I don't want to do this all on my own
And to tell the truth, I hate to be alone
And if you were dying here, you have to find a way to leave
When you're dying here, you have to find a way to leave
When you're drowning you have to force yourself to breathe
(I have to force myself to breathe)
And if I look to the sky for hope,
I hope I remember to believe."

Beautiful.

"When you're drowning you have to force yourself to breathe
(I have to force myself to breathe)
And if I look to the sky for hope,
I hope I remember to believe"

Stunning. You simply amaze me.

you're amazing.

Wow...

The first stanza inspires me.
The first two are the best.

This is great, I love the word choice
for the second line of the second stanza.

"Contemplate the silence." The blunt tone of this line works well to enhance its philosophical nature. :)

"Sleep it all away." I really connected to this line. I often try to 'sleep away' my worries.

"Because I am losing my mind and my heart." How angsty and heart-wrenching.

so much beauty, it's absolutely lovely. i've never been the one to write in long lines, but you make it so effortless and light. this is was catching and completely inspirational, veryy nice job! i look forward to more(:

it's hard to find a good, long, concreate poem, but this is definitely one of them. it blew my mind.

i lovelovelove;
"Watching as everything is falling out of place all the time
And I really want to scream into the pouring rain
Stand face-to-face with the oncoming train
Filled with a vastness I can't contain
I'm standing in the downpour still waiting for a sign"

that was fantastic !
keep up the amazing work.

I was only going to add, not review- Until the last 4 lines.
When you're drowning you have to force yourself to breathe
(I have to force myself to breathe)
And if I look to the sky for hope,
I hope I remember to believe

Beautiful. Absolutely fucking incredible, I can't even tell you how much I love those lines. So wonderfully made, and honestly, it's helping to inspire me (which has become ever so hard as of late) So, shit, I say thank you for that. I'm glad I read this poem.