|Reviews for Fenice Amore|
| Nalledia 9/20/12 . chapter 10
This was a good story, interestingly so. There are, however, almost no descriptions of the way your characters look physically, which means that readers make up what they think the character looks like instead of what you think they look like. Your world is fairly well constructed, but again, it's not explained very well to the reader and it leaves a lot of questions: what exactly is the cult, and why are they 'evil'? Why do they want this child to ruke the world? What exactly is a Holy Fae and why are there only three? Did they fight this cult, and were exterminated as a result? How is a were-panther and a Holy Fae borne from a witch and a warlock, despite the fact that their souls may or may not have been these creatures before? You know why, but readers don't and not giving reasons makes for an overly cliched feel, and a somewhat impromptu writing style, which makes a story lose its sincerity. I also feel that you've cut this story too short: it's barely begun and you're already stopping it for a sequel? It doesn't really matter how many chapters you have in a story, you can have one or a million, but the story has to finish, and not just end with a bam, and now it's over like this one, but smoothed out, cleaned and polished and feel finished: but that doesn't mean it can't leave the reader guessing, which you seem to want at the end of this one, but your story is not finished, there is more to tell before you bring out a sequel. Rather add a few more chapters to this than start another of only 10 chapters again. This really has an interesting and unique plot line which is only dampened by how you've told it.
This all being said, I will add that I'm not flaming you, even though it reads much like a flame. I enjoyed this story otherwise; it's uniqueness caught my eye and it's kept me reading to the end. Well done on such an interesting idea.
| Guest 7/7/12 . chapter 1
| Guest 7/7/12 . chapter 5
great story so far
| whatdotheydream 5/25/12 . chapter 10
please hurry, and make the sequel! I LOVE IT! It's so cool, and cute, and I really hope it doesn't end in tragedy!
| whatdotheydream 5/24/12 . chapter 3
Poor dearies! How confusing for them.
| Non.graceful 5/4/12 . chapter 1
I like it. It's interesting.
| MidnightRomancer 3/13/12 . chapter 10
Oh, come on. You KNOW you can't just leave a cliff-hanger like that and not create a sequel! You're torturing your readers!
Anyway, I love the whole soulmate thing, it's just a little weird that she grew up to be his little sister. I had incest thoughts for the first few chapters lols but it was good
| theanonymousreviewer 2/4/12 . chapter 10
I think this is a little too rushed and does not make complete sense... Maybe if you lengtened it...
| R. Ficst 2/3/12 . chapter 10
1. "big brother magic" ADORABLE moment!
2. you leave with such a cliff-hanger? This is marked as complete! Call in a sequel if you like, but this story is not complete without it! Oh, the cruelty!
| Peachie Miss 2/3/12 . chapter 10
Oh my. Very captivating story, the way you wrote it, switching from pov to pov, definitely caught my eye and made the chapters fly. Matty and Katie have a sort of weird relationship, like if he were any more commanding, it'd be bad, but I'm still rooting for them. William you dummy, you promised. So why has he lost his memory? This is like the worst time ever for that to have happened. And man. Katie should be suspicious of anyone else from now on. Angel of light, but freakishly cold, saying strange things? Hmm, definitely not kosher. So what will happen? I can't wait for the sequel.
| Krush32 4/5/10 . chapter 9
I really like this story, I think there should be a sequel.
| SeaJade Song 3/19/10 . chapter 9
sequil id rather know what happens next rather than kno what happens before :] great chap. how can neither of them see that william is evil?
| Madison302-too lazy to sign in 3/19/10 . chapter 9
The the sequel
Love the story
| x.rawr.x 3/19/10 . chapter 9
please please please do a sequel, pretty please with a cherry on top and sprinkles ! :D
| SeaJade Song 12/23/09 . chapter 8
ek! poor matthew. this is one awsome story!