 Roselyn Parker 2009-10-12 . chapter 1I don't know your age so I can't say whether a good or bad grade was deserved, but I rather enjoyed your little fable. :) Although, I will say, as a fan of wolves, I was sad to see your wolf meet such a sad ending!
I think it was a good idea to include the moral to your story at the end.
The only thing I would suggest is that, next time you try a fable, is that you try it in a 3-style. You know, the hero/villain tries something 3 times before it works? You see it all the time in both ancient and modern storytelling. |
 Ihni 2009-10-12 . chapter 1 Moral #2: Bugs can't be trusted.
I can't understand why this didn't get the higher grade, really. I thought it was good. Although, we do like our moral to be more ... fairytale-like, don't we? I feel bad for the poor wolf. |