i like it so far

i like it.

I like it so far, but you could use more vocabulary. Just grab a thesaurus and dictionary, I think your on the right track. I like the way you focus on smaller details, it paints clearer picture. Good job. You kind of broke this in your last two sentences however. This move from detailed narrative to somewhat vague conclusion can be effective, just be careful not to sound rushed. Overall great job.